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PostPosted: Tue May 25, 2010 7:05 pm  Post subject: Poem: Griff Simmons  
~Griff Simmons~

A daring young one
He does it all with a smile
He may be little, but he might know how to use Psymon's gun
People say he should calm down for awhile

A very fun and enerjetic little boy
Loves to express who he is
Always spreading happiness and joy
I'm guessing if it what is an emergency he would search for a cactus and whiz


By the way, I was making this as I was typing, so it might not be good. Just for the heads up. I hoped you liked it.


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PostPosted: Sat May 29, 2010 11:08 pm  Post subject: Re: Poem: Griff Simmons  
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It's good text with wisely chosen words, but you need to work on the rate (tempo) of the poem. The rhymes have to end simultaneously after one sentence to make it sound fitting. Try to read it loudly for yourself, and you will understand what I mean.

Keep up the good work. :)

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 05, 2010 11:11 pm  Post subject: Re: Poem: Griff Simmons  
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I was about to tell you just the same, but Joni was too quick for me :D

Keep up the good work :thumbsup and keep the Art forum alive :)

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PostPosted: Thu Jun 10, 2010 7:33 am  Post subject: Re: Poem: Griff Simmons  
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To tell you the truth, it seems simple. I do that a lot sometimes too.

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PostPosted: Tue Jul 20, 2010 8:57 am  Post subject: Re: Poem: Griff Simmons  
Allegra might be next. She's my second favorite character. :)


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